Okaeri
The plane arrived at precisely 7:53 a.m. Its descent onto the Kansai
International Airport's transit track unfolded without anything out of the
ordinary. As the machine was coming to a full stop, ShengJi was staring outside
the window, feeling thankful that land was nearby again. The same lady came to
help him with his small suitcase and held his hand until they arrived inside.
She brought him all the way to the receiving area, where family members,
business partners, and taxi drivers patiently waited for their passenger.
Since ShengJi had nothing more than his carry-on, he was escorted
towards the crowd. He was desperately trying to spot his onee-san’s long
hair and kind-hearted smile, but he could not seem to locate her. His chest felt
like it was clattering from the inside. At the same moment, the flight
attendant let go of his hand gently, which enhanced the little boy’s discomfort.
The seconds following seemed like eternity to ShengJi. He felt his abandoned hand
become moist, as his eyes looked around the crowd rapidly.
A delicate hand waved around to his right, dressed in a lovely
plum-coloured dress. She was there. Shizuka…onee-san!
ShengJi rushed to his big sister as if he had finally found something he had
been searching all his life. She greeted him with bright eyes and open arms. “I’ve
missed you too, Shuji-chan.” She
patted his back in circles, which always reminded the little boy of how she
used to care for him as a toddler.
“Shall we go, little brother?” she asked, grabbing his hand and
suitcase. ShengJi’s answer was quick and positive. All feelings of anxiety had
lifted from his chest. “Yes, I couldn’t wait to see you again, onee-san.”
Shizuka had learned to drive since ShengJi had seen her last. They embarked
in the dark blue vehicle, and after a long time stuck in the airport traffic,
they finally hit the road to Kashihara, where their mother’s modest home was
situated.
Years ago, the whole family lived in the effervescent city of Tokyo,
where Nadeshiko had studied nursing. Shizuka was born as a gift to a loving
marriage, in spring when the cherry trees blossomed and shivered in the morning
wind. It was such a beautiful day, imbued with peace and calm, that Nadeshiko implored
her husband that they name her as such, Shizuka, which meant quiet in her native tongue. The little
girl had grown honoring her name, as she was as beautiful as flower blooms and
as relaxed as a snoozing kitten.
Quite the opposite, ShengJi arrived in autumn, the season of dying
leaves. Nadeshiko’s water broke as they were travelling by train, which made
things rather complicated on the way to the hospital. He was born in the
evening, after long hours of hard labour. His first breath in the world was
joined with a loud and painful scream, proof that he was alive. Nadeshiko, who
had promised a Chinese name for her newborn son, chose to call him life.
They arrived to Kashihara around 10 a.m. “Just in time to start
preparing lunch,” thought Shizuka out loud. ShengJi passed the fence, walked
down the short pathway, and pushed the front door. He had not been to this
house yet, as his mother’s move took place a few months ago, when her health
had once again deteriorated. “It feels like home,” he noticed, even though he
knew not the grounds, he somehow could sense his mother’s aura lingering everywhere
around the place. Nadeshiko might have been ill, but she always loved flowers
and the courtyard was filled with them, probably planted carefully by Shizuka’s
hand. The relaxing perfumes filled the summer air while the colours glimmered
in the morning sun. ShengJi’s fears of returning to Japan had completely
lifted.
The silhouette of his mother was waiting for him in the entrance. She
was maintaining herself with her hand on the wall. A joyfilled ShengJi
hurriedly took off his shoes and ran to his mother’s arms.
Jiliade • January 15-16, 2018
Jiliade • January 15-16, 2018
Honestly, a bit strange to me. Mixed review. o.o A few criticisms...
ReplyDeleteThere were a few minor errors (Eg: Pairs instead of peers) , and the word choice isn't what I'm used to. Ironically, uses a few words that are new to me, so that's cool. "Effervescent"... XD. Sounds like you wrote this after not speaking english for a few months, or earlier in life when eastern culture was new and cool, and threw a thesaurus at it for every adverb that sounded awesome.
I wonder if this was based on a day dream, or a fantasy? If you just thought it up out of nowhere? It's cute!
I'd question whether a child so young-seeming would recognize his older sister after years, but I guess it's hard to forget family faces ^_^.
I'd wonder what boy would be scared of a flight, but lean out and look towards the window when they land instead of curling up like a turtle in his seat, under his seat belt, until the turbulence and bumps stopped rattling their flimsy gravity-defying aluminum tube.
Feel sorry for a young boy that's used to a normally firm and professional father...
What boy sees a completely alien house and thinks "It feels like home?!" XD ....aw shucks, this story's gonna be all mystical isn't it? Lucky a doctor can afford a lovely place.
If you continue this, lemme know. x3 After all, this is only the start to a story~ (Also, aiming for All the feels <.< )